Country Song



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Country Song

Postby robin grimmond » Sun Jun 08, 2014 8:45 am

Here's one of my more recent compositions, performed by John Butterworth.

All feedback welcome.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V5KYfh17uO8
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Re: Country Song

Postby lo&m » Tue Jun 10, 2014 1:58 pm

I like it. It's a sort of Streets Of Baltimore for our times.
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Re: Country Song

Postby Cheyenne Jones » Sat Jun 14, 2014 4:15 pm

Hi Robin. Great idea well sung and played , but the rhythm and the chords used don't do it for me

I was hoping for something a bit more interesting structure wise, and found it too repetitive.

for a so called Country Song , is this something you have been working on for a while? if not I

would try a re write, it's the type of lyric more suited to Jake Thakery , in fact it would be a good song

for him, I assume he is still giging . but that music needs a bit of relief from that particular beat

A comedy song does not need to use three to four chords, but if it thats your intentions the melody needs to take us

somewhere, my critique is based on using the song professionally, so if thats not your bag so to speak

ignore what I've said .
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Re: Country Song

Postby lo&m » Sat Jun 14, 2014 5:34 pm

Jake Thackray passed away about ten years ago. His recorded work is his legacy. However, if you want to hear Jake's songs sung live John Watterson goes out as Fake Thackray recreating his songs for a live audience. I've seen him a couple times. He's very good.
https://www.facebook.com/events/1481934688704289/?fref=ts
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Re: Country Song

Postby Juke831 » Sat Jun 14, 2014 7:33 pm

Mmmmm. I worked with Thack in Germany 27 years ago. I think he would of liked it. The lyrics ain't to bad but set to this honky rockin track doesn't work for me. I would rather under produce it and keep it more simple with instruments. The vocal wouldn't seem so far removed from the backing as it does at the moment. All in all well done.
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Re: Country Song

Postby Cheyenne Jones » Tue Jun 17, 2014 7:56 am

Shame about Jake, I live in France and apparently Jake did a lot of his songs
to a French Singers music, in fact they were parodies.

Last time I saw him was in Nailsworth at a local Pub, in Gloucester,
sadly missed There should be more like Jake , Does anyone know of any Britt Country Bands
who sing comedy songs ?

I co wrote some songs way back in the seventies for The Wurzels, I see they are still giging and
often go to Australia, where the club scene is still Big, another older Duo heads out to Aussie Land
frequently Irish Duo

Anyone know of a Britt Country Band with at least two girl front singers. an address would be
appreciated be appreciated as I have a couple of County/Pop song I'm pitching .
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Re: Country Song

Postby Rlp85 » Thu Oct 30, 2014 3:31 pm

just had a listen. I like it, bit of fun.
I subscribed to your youtube channel so i can keep an eye out for other stuff you do.
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Re: Country Song

Postby Space Cowboy » Fri Oct 31, 2014 3:43 pm

Jerry Reed would have loved it.
Waylon Jennings.
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